Monday, November 17, 2008

End

Anxious,
Breathing heavy,
Waiting, waiting, waiting…

Personally connected,
Body connected
Soul disconnected.

Nice to meet you too.

Mute, disconnecting.
Thousand words, million letters,
Playing hide and seek in my head.

Awkward silence, longing kiss,
It feels so right, it feels so right.
This is so wrong.

Verbally emotional,
Physically linked,
It’s been so long.

Leave it all behind,
Leave it all behind.
Let it go.

3 comments:

a.v.koshy said...

i love your blog-title and photo and the i like i hate thing but the rest of the poems while good could do with a lot of reworking

elf_asura said...

Hey Krittika - Been reading the poems and I have a lot of reservations about many things.
1. CON: Why do so many poems (not just of yours but it might be a generational thing) sound like cheap alternative rock lyrics?
2. PRO: However,this kind of stuff works in places in your poetry (soe of it is dylanesque) and sends a spark up my you know what!! For eg:
(a) Mute, disconnecting.
Thousand words, million letters,
Playing hide and seek in my head.
(b) Blackmail, threat mail.
Suicide letters, printed anguish.
(c)I am
A mess, a test, an experiment of disaster
The thread, the puppet, and the puppet master
I am
The court, the ball, the key player
The fraud, the fool, and the betrayer
I am a victim
Of malevolence, guilt and blunder
Does it make you wonder?
So what do I say? Is this poetry-writing thingy something recent or something just angsty? Do you read poetry?
There's potential here but it will mean more suffering if you want to make it happen!!!!

Wasted Marionette said...

Apparently expressionism breeds on the angst and anguish felt by the artist. Some of my poems might be a little angsty, since poetry is a form of expression is it not?